Query Letters: The Art of Persuasion Without Revealing the Whole Plot

Query Letters: The Art of Persuasion Without Revealing the Whole Plot

As a seasoned screenwriter and someone who frequently advises aspiring writers, it is imperative to address a common misconception: should a writer reveal the entire plot in a cover letter to an agent? The answer is unequivocally no. While the entire plot revelation may seem comprehensive and enticing, it risks being too detailed and time-consuming. Let us delve into why a more concise and compelling query letter is the better choice.

Understanding the Difference Between Cover Letters and Query Letters

A cover letter, often confused with a query letter, is a letter accompanying the material to which it refers. Query letters, on the other hand, are designed to elicit interest from an agent or producer to request the actual material. They serve as a means to make a compelling pitch without overwhelming the reader with detailed information.

The Ideal Structure of a Query Letter

A successful query letter is brief, typically under one page. It should be as concise as possible while effectively presenting both the writer and the material. The ideal structure comprises:

A brief introduction of the writer. A suggestion that the writer has completed a piece that they wish to share. A closing paragraph thanking the recipient for their time, including contact information.

Why Brevity is King in Query Letters

Many agents and producers prefer inquiries and "about" the writer rather than detailed information about the story. This is primarily to avoid potential legal issues. Describing a story in a query letter can leave the writer vulnerable to lawsuits if the story bears even a slight resemblance to a future work, even from a different source. A classic example is Coming to America, where Eddie Murphy and Paramount faced legal battles with Art Buchwald over the similarities to his unpublished book.

Representatives of writers sometimes only read these queries, preferring to take the next steps only if explicitly invited. This approach helps protect both the writer and the agent from legal complications. For instance, in the case of Buchwald, his lawsuit against Paramount was among the most notable in the industry, with Buchwald eventually winning a significant sum.

When to Break the Rules

In rare cases, if a writer has learned that a target recipient is willing to read information about the offered material, brevity is still paramount. The writer should provide only a log-line: a one- to two-sentence description of the story premise. This log-line should encapsulate the core of the story, such as the first act or acts, providing intrigue without giving away the whole plot.

A Hierarchical Approach to Storytelling

Once the interest is generated, the next stages involve revealing more details. If the recipient requests a synopsis, outline, or treatment after seeing the log-line, the writer can then share the entire story. By going through this hierarchical approach, the writer retains the narrative's value and continues to engage the recipient effectively.

Stay Informed: Key Resources

To help aspiring writers navigate the complex world of screenwriting, I recommend two of my books:

Lateral Screenwriting: This book is a comprehensive guide that provides practical insights into the craft of screenwriting. The Last Reveal - Movies, Screenwriting, and the Decline of Western Cinemazation: Here, I explore the evolving nature of storytelling in the modern era.

Remember, the key to a successful query letter is to be concise, engaging, and leave the reader wanting more. With these guidelines, writers can attract the attention of agents and producers without oversharing.

Good luck!